in a winter’s morning i could see the trees soaring over the roof top’s.I can see my friends writing and thinking right beside me.While i write i was writing i could hear the birds chirping away in a lovely tune.i can touch the black gravel lying flatter that a thiner then a peace of white smooth paper on the ground.
I can touch the rough dark brown bark covering the tree like a cloth.i can smell the burning tires on the ground.Then peach jumped up it was time to go in side
I like your first paragraph.
ReplyDeleteRemember to make your I's capitals.
Maybe edit this sentence 'I could see the trees soaring over the roof top’s.'
i agree thnx0
Deletemaby capital letters :)
ReplyDeleteBY LIAM
Really good story Josiah but next time make sure that you put capital letter at the start of sentences, please don't make your text colour white it's really hard too read.
ReplyDeletehello Josiah :P
ReplyDeleteI like the way u said ''I can smell the burning tires on the ground.''
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good job I really like this part
ReplyDelete'I can smell the burning tires on the ground.''